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nsanelilmunky
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 |  Subject: Sleep and Showers  Wed Oct 21, 2009 8:03 pm | |
| five and twenty years I could sit here in a dream
listening to the patters of the rain on my window pane
so many hours pass by as it beats out my lullaby
And in this reverie I see him standing there
no wars or wounds to show his years
smiling from the shades and singing to the rain
so softly I go into his arms for this night
and lull in the vapours of the gentle showers
and finally at peace they'll find me as if sleeping
as my soul has left the thing there.
Eh... I'm half asleep and it sounds good at the time. It's strange the little things that come to mind when close to sleep. |
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GhostRed
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| | Subject: Re: Sleep and Showers Wed Oct 21, 2009 8:21 pm | |
| | nsanelilmunky wrote: |
so softly I go into his arms for this night
and lull in the vapours of the gentle showers
and finally at peace they'll find me as if sleeping
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I like this a lot, it's very Cure-esque. Beautiful! |
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RedAngel
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| | Subject: Re: Sleep and Showers Thu Oct 22, 2009 8:57 am | |
| Wow. What lovely imagery, Nsane! |
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WrappedinReflection
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| | Subject: Re: Sleep and Showers Thu Oct 22, 2009 5:08 pm | |
| I'm adoring the first line.
That's how I feel when I am having a euphoric moment that I don't want to end
Very lovely indeed! _________________ | The real power that controls us, is the shameful, endless, consuming, destroying, unquenchable, greed for love |
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nsanelilmunky
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| | Subject: Re: Sleep and Showers Thu Oct 22, 2009 6:44 pm | |
| | GhostRed wrote: | | nsanelilmunky wrote: |
so softly I go into his arms for this night
and lull in the vapours of the gentle showers
and finally at peace they'll find me as if sleeping
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I like this a lot, it's very Cure-esque. Beautiful! |
| RedAngel wrote: | | Wow. What lovely imagery, Nsane! |
| WrappedinReflection wrote: | I'm adoring the first line.
That's how I feel when I am having a euphoric moment that I don't want to end
Very lovely indeed! |
Danke. Heh. Maybe I should write more when half asleep? |
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nsanelilmunky
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TheDarkHippie
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| | Subject: Re: Sleep and Showers Mon Nov 02, 2009 3:27 am | |
| eh, sorry not much help there, but your poetry is great nsane!! |
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ravengrim
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| | Subject: Re: Sleep and Showers Mon Nov 02, 2009 7:15 pm | |
| Beautiful poem nsane.
You know for some reason seeing the name of this thread I thought it was going to be a poll ,kind of like do you shower before you go to sleep or when you get up in the morning.
And I'm sorry I don't know anything about making doll faces. _________________   @themorrigan1972 |
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